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December 10, 2014 keii4ii 11 Comments

Lots of unexplained things going on, and for that I apologize. My stories tend to be better read in huge chunks (i.e. multiple chapters) so you don’t have to wait too long to find out certain things. I’m trying to make it enjoyable as a trickling webcomic, too, but I still have a long way to go.

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I wouldn’t worry too much about the time it takes. It seems a bit better to lovingly draw it out then to rush it (believe me, there are a lot of things I wish I would have slow-rolled in Autumn Bay). Just remember to give out some nuggets every now and then, just a little bit at a time.

P.S. It’s okay to “tell” instead of “showing” sometimes… “Show, don’t tell” is a guideline, not a hard-and-fast rule. As an example, think of the text-crawl at the beginning of the Star Wars films. :)

It’s true. Between slightly too fast and slightly too slow, I’d go with the latter because “uh I have no idea what’s going on” is the last reaction I’d want from anyone reading my comic.

I never liked Star Wars films, to be honest… XD Shhhh it’s a secret.

You don’t… *twitch* like… *twitch, twitch* STAR WARS?!?!? That’s it! I can’t know you any more!

I’m totally kidding, of course! :) Especially after the atrocities George Lucas committed with, let’s see… repeatedly mucking around with his classic films, pretty much the whole prequel trilogy, everything he’s touched since 1983…

I still stand by what I said about “show, don’t tell”…

I agree with you. It’s a rule that should be followed most of the time, but sometimes it ought to be flipped. I greatly enjoyed Battlestar Galactica (the remake. Haven’t seen the original) and it opens with a brief explanation of the events that led to the intro scene. Very brief, far from a text-crawl, just enough information to get the viewers not completely lost.

Even when telling, though, I’d still supplement it with visuals so it’s not a WALL of text. Even a blank black background (which is what Battlestar Galactica used) can do the job if that’s the best visual accompaniment for the tone.

Nobody’s commented on it yet, so… It works a lot better to distinguish the languages. And is surprisingly readable for a handwriting font. I definitely prefer this over the first version.

Hi! I really, honestly like your comic, and very glad I ran into it by chance. Not only do I find your artwork beautiful, story engaging, and pacing quite nice, but in a way, it’s inspiring to see an artist put their work forward even if they have insecurities about how it might be received. (I love reading your comments too.) I’m in the process of preparing a big revision for my comic as well, and so it’s just nice to be able to connect here. I look forward to seeing your process and progress, and if you want you are more than welcome to read my comic too. http://toruslink.com

For a moment there I thought I was confused about Suyori being female shamans.

Danbi does have a tendency to cause that sorta confusion.

Re-read!
Loved the ‘streeeetch’ followed by the ‘wow’ here -my thoughts exactly- ;-)
(even though that’s not where the page takes it?)
And that’s just after you expressed your doubts about your anatomical skills on the previous page… please: Don’t !!
Even though the depiction may not always be officially ‘corrrect’, your images *allways* convey what they should – to me!

Having read beyond this point before, and seen more, I’m sure that if I’d see Ethan in real life I’d…… drool.
And (having already read beyond this point) I’ve fallen in love with Ethan as a *person* – meaning your characters are so utterly well-developed and … well: real !!!

;0; Your comment has made my day! I’m glad and amazed that you can feel such a connection with my character! I try to make them feel real to the readers, because they feel real to me.

I feel like I’m getting mixed signals about gender in this world.